Script surgery

Yesterday I had a script surgery appointment with Simon.

I have been writing my script for a couple of week going over different parts and seeing how it flows. The workshops really helped as I now know how to write it correctly using the final draft software, which is very simple to use. At first I didn't have much action or scene descriptions, I was finding this difficult trying to establish what was happening in each scene and writing it on paper. I was also telling the story rather than showing it. Simon told me I need to write only what we (the audience) see on screen.

He also suggested that I should add some more drama and be creative. My initial idea was to have my character (Neal) being late for work. Simon pointed out that it would be much more dramatic if 'Neal' was heading for a job interview or he was on a warning and could risk losing his job if he was to be late again. I like the suggestion as it really shows the change in the story when he is met with 'Linda'. I changed the script to Neal being late for a important job interview. This creates a big decision for Neal for him to choose between helping out Linda or trying to get to the interview on time.

I have finished my first draft ready to submit tomorrow. It is printed and stapled ready to hand in. I know that I will have plenty of re-writing to do like Steve told us, the majority of the process comes down to re-writing. It is the first script I have ever written so I know it won't be perfect.
I look forward to filming the first two minutes of the story.